English Help V.for me this time
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English Help V.for me this time
Ok so i have posted on a job opening. This is a internal posting. Internally we use a elvalution system called OP (objective performance). So when you apply if you resume passes the first triage they request our OP for the past 2 years.
However for the past couple of years my current Dept is understaffed and so i get screw on it because almost EVERYONE here is Do Not Meet. I am very qualified for this job. So when sending in my OP i wanted to inform the person hiring that the OP in flawed... he is in a totally different dept and so wouldn't know this.
So when sending him the OP i have written this email. What do you guys think?
This is VERY important to me... not just because the job is right down my alley, but also because its a pretty big promotion...
However for the past couple of years my current Dept is understaffed and so i get screw on it because almost EVERYONE here is Do Not Meet. I am very qualified for this job. So when sending in my OP i wanted to inform the person hiring that the OP in flawed... he is in a totally different dept and so wouldn't know this.
So when sending him the OP i have written this email. What do you guys think?
Hello Mr XXX,
As requested I am attaching my 2009 & 2010 BC1964. Also attached to this email you will find my Objective Performance of the same years. However I think it is important for me to clarify some of the numbers included in this Objective Performance. For the past years the Small and Medium Department has been under staffed. Because of the way our OP is made this means that we are a small number of people to try to reach our objectives. I want to take this time to put in perspective the results of my OP. At this point in the SMB department almost everyone, including the directors, are Do Not Meet.
Because of this I have taken the liberty of also including the Objective Performance for the previous years of which I was occupying a position similar to the job offer you have posted on Bellnet.
I appreciate the time you will take to took at these documents. I am very interested in working for you and look forward to hearing from you about this position.
As requested I am attaching my 2009 & 2010 BC1964. Also attached to this email you will find my Objective Performance of the same years. However I think it is important for me to clarify some of the numbers included in this Objective Performance. For the past years the Small and Medium Department has been under staffed. Because of the way our OP is made this means that we are a small number of people to try to reach our objectives. I want to take this time to put in perspective the results of my OP. At this point in the SMB department almost everyone, including the directors, are Do Not Meet.
Because of this I have taken the liberty of also including the Objective Performance for the previous years of which I was occupying a position similar to the job offer you have posted on Bellnet.
I appreciate the time you will take to took at these documents. I am very interested in working for you and look forward to hearing from you about this position.
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Hello Mr XXX,
As requested, I am attaching my 2009 & 2010 BC1964. Also attached to this email you will find my Objective Performance of the same years. However I think it is important for me to clarify some of the numbers included in this Objective Performance. For the past several years, the Small and Medium Business Department has been under-staffed. As a result of the way our OP is made as well as the lack of resources at our disposal, we are a small number of employees trying to reach our revenue objectives. Consequently, due to personnel constraints encountered in the SMB department, many of the team members, including the directors find this task rather daunting and many of the team members within the department are classified as Do Not Meet.
Because of this I have taken the liberty of also including the Objective Performance for the previous years of which I was occupying a position similar to the job offer you have posted on Bellnet.
Thank you for taking the time to review the documents attached and considering my candidacy for this position. I look forward to the challenges this position has to offer as well as the opportunity to utilize my wide range of skills and to develop new ones. Please feel free to contact me at any time should you require any additional information. I look forward to your reply.
As requested, I am attaching my 2009 & 2010 BC1964. Also attached to this email you will find my Objective Performance of the same years. However I think it is important for me to clarify some of the numbers included in this Objective Performance. For the past several years, the Small and Medium Business Department has been under-staffed. As a result of the way our OP is made as well as the lack of resources at our disposal, we are a small number of employees trying to reach our revenue objectives. Consequently, due to personnel constraints encountered in the SMB department, many of the team members, including the directors find this task rather daunting and many of the team members within the department are classified as Do Not Meet.
Because of this I have taken the liberty of also including the Objective Performance for the previous years of which I was occupying a position similar to the job offer you have posted on Bellnet.
Thank you for taking the time to review the documents attached and considering my candidacy for this position. I look forward to the challenges this position has to offer as well as the opportunity to utilize my wide range of skills and to develop new ones. Please feel free to contact me at any time should you require any additional information. I look forward to your reply.
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Here it is translated in to Yiddish:
העלא מר קסקסקס,
ווי פארלאנגט, איך בין אַטאַטשינג מיין 2009 & 2010 בק1964. אויך אַטאַטשט צו דעם בליצפּאָסט איר וועט געפֿינען מיין אַבדזשעקטיוו פֿאָרשטעלונג פון דער זעלביקער יאָרן. אבער איך טראַכטן עס איז וויכטיק פֿאַר מיר צו דערקלערן עטלעכע פון די נומערן אַרייַנגערעכנט אין דעם אַבדזשעקטיוו פֿאָרשטעלונג. ווארים דער פאַרגאַנגענהייַט עטלעכע יאר, די קליינע און מעדיום געשעפֿט אָפּטייל איז אונטער-סטאַפט. ווי אַ רעזולטאַט פון די וועג אונדזער אַפּ איז געמאכט ווי גוט ווי די נויט פון רעסורסן אין אונדזער באַזייַטיקונג, מיר זענען אַ קליין נומער פון עמפּלוייז טריינג צו דערגרייכן אונדזער רעוועך אַבדזשעקטיווז. דעריבער, רעכט צו פּערסאַנעל קאַנסטריינץ געפּלאָנטערט אין די סמב אַמט, פילע פון די מאַנשאַפֿט מיטגלידער, אַרייַנגערעכנט די דירעקטאָרס געפֿינען דעם אַרבעט גאַנץ דאָנטינג און פילע פון די מאַנשאַפֿט מיטגלידער אין דער אָפּטיילונג זענען קלאַסאַפייד ווי נישט מיט.
ווייַל פון דעם איך האב גענומען די פרייַהייַט פון אויך אַרייַנגערעכנט די אַבדזשעקטיוו פֿאָרשטעלונג פֿאַר די פריערדיקע יאָרן פון וואָס איך געווען אַקיאַפּייינג אַ שטעלע ענלעך צו דער אַרבעט פאָרשלאָגן איר האָט אַרייַנגעשיקט אויף בעללנעט.
דאַנקען דיר פֿאַר גענומען די צייַט צו רעצענזיע די דאָקומענטן אַטאַטשט און באַטראַכטן מיין קאַנדידאַסי פֿאַר דעם שטעלע. איך קוק פאָרויס צו די טשאַלאַנדזשיז דעם שטעלע האט צו פאָרשלאָגן ווי גוט ווי די געלעגנהייט צו אויסצונוצן מיין ברייט קייט פון סקילז און צו אַנטוויקלען ניו אָנעס. ביטע פילן פֿרייַ צו קאָנטאַקט מיר אין קיין צייַט זאָל איר דאַרפן קיין נאך אינפֿאָרמאַציע. איך קוק פאָרויס צו דיין ענטפער.
ווי פארלאנגט, איך בין אַטאַטשינג מיין 2009 & 2010 בק1964. אויך אַטאַטשט צו דעם בליצפּאָסט איר וועט געפֿינען מיין אַבדזשעקטיוו פֿאָרשטעלונג פון דער זעלביקער יאָרן. אבער איך טראַכטן עס איז וויכטיק פֿאַר מיר צו דערקלערן עטלעכע פון די נומערן אַרייַנגערעכנט אין דעם אַבדזשעקטיוו פֿאָרשטעלונג. ווארים דער פאַרגאַנגענהייַט עטלעכע יאר, די קליינע און מעדיום געשעפֿט אָפּטייל איז אונטער-סטאַפט. ווי אַ רעזולטאַט פון די וועג אונדזער אַפּ איז געמאכט ווי גוט ווי די נויט פון רעסורסן אין אונדזער באַזייַטיקונג, מיר זענען אַ קליין נומער פון עמפּלוייז טריינג צו דערגרייכן אונדזער רעוועך אַבדזשעקטיווז. דעריבער, רעכט צו פּערסאַנעל קאַנסטריינץ געפּלאָנטערט אין די סמב אַמט, פילע פון די מאַנשאַפֿט מיטגלידער, אַרייַנגערעכנט די דירעקטאָרס געפֿינען דעם אַרבעט גאַנץ דאָנטינג און פילע פון די מאַנשאַפֿט מיטגלידער אין דער אָפּטיילונג זענען קלאַסאַפייד ווי נישט מיט.
ווייַל פון דעם איך האב גענומען די פרייַהייַט פון אויך אַרייַנגערעכנט די אַבדזשעקטיוו פֿאָרשטעלונג פֿאַר די פריערדיקע יאָרן פון וואָס איך געווען אַקיאַפּייינג אַ שטעלע ענלעך צו דער אַרבעט פאָרשלאָגן איר האָט אַרייַנגעשיקט אויף בעללנעט.
דאַנקען דיר פֿאַר גענומען די צייַט צו רעצענזיע די דאָקומענטן אַטאַטשט און באַטראַכטן מיין קאַנדידאַסי פֿאַר דעם שטעלע. איך קוק פאָרויס צו די טשאַלאַנדזשיז דעם שטעלע האט צו פאָרשלאָגן ווי גוט ווי די געלעגנהייט צו אויסצונוצן מיין ברייט קייט פון סקילז און צו אַנטוויקלען ניו אָנעס. ביטע פילן פֿרייַ צו קאָנטאַקט מיר אין קיין צייַט זאָל איר דאַרפן קיין נאך אינפֿאָרמאַציע. איך קוק פאָרויס צו דיין ענטפער.
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Hello Mr XXX,
As requested, I am attaching my 2009 & 2010 BC1964. Also attached to this email you will find my Objective Performance of the same years. However I think it is important for me to clarify some of the numbers included in this Objective Performance. For the past several years, the Small and Medium Business Department has been under-staffed. As a result of the way our OP is made as well as the lack of resources at our disposal, we are a small number of employees trying to reach our revenue objectives. Consequently, due to personnel constraints encountered in the SMB department, many of the team members, including the directors find this task rather daunting and many of the team members within the department are classified as Do Not Meet.
Because of this I have taken the liberty of also including the Objective Performance for the previous years of which I was occupying a position similar to the job offer you have posted on Bellnet.
Thank you for taking the time to review the documents attached and considering my candidacy for this position. I look forward to the challenges this position has to offer as well as the opportunity to utilize my wide range of skills and to develop new ones. Please feel free to contact me at any time should you require any additional information. I look forward to your reply.
As requested, I am attaching my 2009 & 2010 BC1964. Also attached to this email you will find my Objective Performance of the same years. However I think it is important for me to clarify some of the numbers included in this Objective Performance. For the past several years, the Small and Medium Business Department has been under-staffed. As a result of the way our OP is made as well as the lack of resources at our disposal, we are a small number of employees trying to reach our revenue objectives. Consequently, due to personnel constraints encountered in the SMB department, many of the team members, including the directors find this task rather daunting and many of the team members within the department are classified as Do Not Meet.
Because of this I have taken the liberty of also including the Objective Performance for the previous years of which I was occupying a position similar to the job offer you have posted on Bellnet.
Thank you for taking the time to review the documents attached and considering my candidacy for this position. I look forward to the challenges this position has to offer as well as the opportunity to utilize my wide range of skills and to develop new ones. Please feel free to contact me at any time should you require any additional information. I look forward to your reply.
As a result of the way our OP is made, the lack of resources at our disposal, and the fact that we are a small number of employees; it is next to impossible to reach our revenue objectives.
Last edited by lowbrow; Jul 23, 2010 at 10:40 AM.
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As a result of the way our OP is CALCULATED, the lack of resources at our disposal makes it next to impossible to reach our objectives.
