ok screw the car thing, and talk about telephones.

 

cell phones.

 

Im doing sports cars, heres my into...true story.....

There I was sitting in the cockpit of a brand new 2002 Acura

RSX Type-S. As my hands gripped the fresh leather steering

wheel, I knew this was going to be an experience of a lifetime.

My body was held perfectly in place like glue by the Recaro racing

seats. When the keys were handed to me by my neighbor who

works for Acura Motors, my eyes lit up like a child on Christmas

morning. When I placed the key into the ignition and turned the

200 horsepower beast over it didn’t make a sound: it made

music. I then had a permanent smile on my face that you couldn’t

wipe off. I then placed my foot on the gas pedal and revved the

engine to its 8,000 rpm redline the vibration of the engine sent

tingles down my spine. With the car on and my foot on the clutch

pedal, I placed my right hand one the shift knob and when

through the gears. The short throw six speed manual

transmission shifted like a warm knife through butter. At the time

I have never driven a manual transmission car before, but I do

race dirt bikes that have clutches, so I wasn’t worried the least

bit. Then my neighbor Rob instructed me to pull out of my

driveway, and I did it the first time and didn’t even stall the

engine, I was so pumped. For the first time in my life I got to

experience the power and performance of a sports car. It was

actually the first car I ever drove, so after that experience I was

hooked. I took it slow for the first couple miles and then Rob told

me to “punch it”. For the first time in my life I began to

appreciate the difference between a sports car and a family car.

The sports car has the ability to accelerate so quickly it’s

unbelievable. Also when pushing it through the corners you tend

to notice that the RSX refuses to go off track of you’re

destination. It was almost like the car stuck to the road like

glue. After that day, I knew what I needed to do. I saved up all

my money from working and bought my very own sports cars.

Every time I drive my Acura Integra(the RSX is the predecessor to

the Integra), I get that same exact feeling. The invention of the

sports car didn’t necessarily mean a lot to everyone, but it means

a great deal to me, and that’s all that matters. The invention of

the sports car loosely relates to the longitude problem of the

17th century in many different ways.

 

:down:

 

i really hope you turn that in so the teacher laughs at you.

then maybe he can read it off to the class and the class can laugh at you.

:rofl:

 

I could give a shit, as long as i get an a

 

the interstate system.

 

wOah fellas. How about some constructive criticism? That IS what he asked for isn't it?

Maybe not everyone excels at writing papers, especially a freshman in college his first semester...sheesh!

Skelly, I thought you started out the intro pretty damn well. But then it seemed to stray, like you were searching for things to be said rather than having them flow from the accompanying thoughts/statements. Good start, put a bit more effort into the thesis statement, you were using too many of the same phrases:

1.) "The invention of the

sports car"......"The invention of

the sports car loosely"


2.) "For the first time in my life I got"......."For the first time in my life I began"

Think of different ways to phrase these repetitious sentences. And use less "I, I, I, I"

IMO, you need not go into as much personal detail as you are.


Hope that helps, good luck cause I hate writing papers. My g/f has a bunch of classes that are writing intensive, she keeps asking me to help. I refuse h:

 

what about VTEC? and the cult following it produced?

 

That's what I was thinking (kind of as a semi-joke but it is plausible). Or what about the rotory engine. You can use MrFatBooty as a reference. :thumbup: Also, the Integra is the predecessor to the RSX, not the other way around.