This is some poetry that I wrote. Lemme know what you think.

1)
Loving you is so easy to do
No matter what you put me through
The way you smile, the way you shine
Oh God I wish that you were mine
But though thats something that just can't be
It's up to me to make you see

How much I love you
You could never know
How much I need you
I just can't show
What you do to me inside
My God how I've tried
Can't you see how much I love you?


2)
Sitting here in the dark, with the lights on bright
For the darkness is in my heart, out of your sight
I wear a mask of happiness so you will leave me be
Because you are the one who brought this upon me

You kissed me and I thought that you meant it
But then a few hours later you infer it didn't mean shit
You used a classic killer and said we should just be friends
And with those few words you made my happiness end

I sit here with a broken heart, too hurt to lick my wound
I guess when it comes to love that I will always be doomed
So being alone is my fate, and there could be no worse
I must live my life without you, which is the ultimate curse

But you are happy, so what else can I say
When I see you smile, the pain goes away
Your happiness lifts my spirits, it lifts them high
But when I am a lone at night, I just want to cry

But some day I will be ok once more
Some day I will pick my heart up off the floor
I will peice it together and put it back in its place
So it can again skip beats when I see a smile on your face


3)
There used to be a cloud that would linger over me
There used to be a fog that made it hard to see
I used to feel like the world was riding on my back
That is, until I loved you, and got my life on track
No longer do those coulds follow me arond
And now the fog is gone, my eyes are heaven bound
They are aimed straight at you, heaven here on earth
And from you my happiness recieved a new birth

So now the world is a fun filled place
All because of that smile on your face
My sorrows are gone, kicked outside
No longer do I have to hide
How I feel inside my heart
I hope as friends we never part
For if that's all we can be together
I hope that it will last forever


4)
Sitting here alone, not by my choice
What I wouldn't give, just to hear your voice
To hold you in my arms, to call you my own
To spend my every waking moment with you alone
To save you from your sorrows and all your fears
To be there to wipe away your sad, salty tears
There isn't a thing for you I wouldn't do
All I want is to just be with you
Of all these things I wish on a star above
Most of all I wish that I had your love

 

Poetry isn't my thing man, but it sounds good. :thumbup:

 

poetry doesn't have to rhyme to be good. just a thought.

 

[fart]h: [/fart]

 

it sounds good! you sure you wrote all that??? j/k

i got some poetry~

everything was fine until this soccer mom mini van bish cut me off

now my jdm front's fawked up and im sad

driver side fender, headlight, hood and rad. support!

hell and the frames even bent....thats better than before

:madfawk: :madfawk: :madfawk: :madfawk: :madfawk: :madfawk:

 

Sounds desperate but well written. From that poem I would have to say "male gets kiss of death because he wasn't challenging enough for the female".

Kiss of death would be a catchy title, now that I think of it.

{all imo}

Nice guys finish last!

 

roses are red
violets are bluish
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